I have to formulate a better claim, because mine isn't really complete. I underlined parts that might make up the idea of the claim, but it is not all in one sentence.
If you could help me think of a different third perspective other than those who support only some methods of assisted suicide.
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I feel that you have some excellent ideas, that just lack clarity. The clarity issues take away slightly from the overall effect of the paper.
There is a good claim, it is just a little too spread out in the opening paragraph.
You have some good ideas and some very good citations for support. While your paper is still very rough, I like where you are going with it. It needs help with the organization however. It got to be very confusing at times. The whole religion paragraph just kind of jumped out of no where sandwhiched between 2 viewpoints.
I actually think that is an alright third claim. At least in my opinion, some forms of assisted suicide are more tolerable than others.
Your foundation is good, and I think you have good claims you can substantually support. With more time, I'm sure it will become more fluid and better organized.
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